D) Stressing the Unusual.
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C) Emphasizing the News.
A beginner in journalism (your colleague) asked you to look through the following leads he / she had written. Help him / her rewrite these leads, emphasizing the news, not the attribution. Limit the attributions to a few words and place them at the end, not the beginning, of the leads.
| 1. At a news conference held at the Department of Energy in Washington, D.C., Monday afternoon the head of the agency told reporters that the Senate's approval of a plan to dump nuclear waste material in the Nevada desert near Las Vegas will provide a safe haven for more than 77,000 tons of radioactive waste. | 2. Tracy Tibitts, Lisa Drolshagen and Dorothy Brayton, all members of the Delta Delta Delta sorority at Iowa State University, appeared in a local courtroom this morning and testified that the defendant, Steven House, appeared drunk when he got into his car to leave the party moments before he struck and killed the pedestrian. |
You are having an internship in one of the local newspapers. Your editor-in-chief asked you to look through the following information and write only a lead for the following story, correcting errors if necessary. Don't forget to take into consideration certain discourse categories.
Gladys Anne Riggs is 81 years old. Her husband, George, died 10 years ago. She is retired and normally receives about $800 a month in Social Security benefits. She complains she has not received her benefits for the past 4 months. When she inquired as to the reasons for the troubles, officials at a Social Security office in your city today explained that she was dead. Four months ago, her check was returned and marked "deceased," so all her benefits were canceled. Because of the error, Mrs. Riggs fears that her check for next month may also be late, and she says she needs the money to buy food and to pay her rent. She lives alone in a one-bedroom apartment and says she has already fallen behind in her rent and is afraid she will be evicted. Social Security officials said that they would correct the problem as soon as possible and that she would receive a check for all the benefits she had missed during the past 4 months, but that it might take several weeks to issue the check. They suggested that she apply for welfare until the check arrives.
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| B) Using the Proper Sentence Structure. | | | F) Updating Your Lead. |